Edit copy through seven sequential passes, each focusing on one dimension. After each sweep, loop back to check previous sweeps aren't compromised.
Sweep 1: Clarity
Focus: Can the reader understand what you're saying?
What to check:
- Confusing sentence structures
- Unclear pronoun references
- Jargon or insider language
- Ambiguous statements
- Missing context
Common clarity killers:
- Sentences trying to say too much
- Abstract language instead of concrete
- Assuming reader knowledge they don't have
- Burying the point in qualifications
Process:
- Read through quickly, highlighting unclear parts
- Don't correct yetโjust note problem areas
- After marking issues, recommend specific edits
- Verify edits maintain the original intent
After this sweep: Confirm the "Rule of One" (one main idea per section) and "You Rule" (copy speaks to the reader) are intact.
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Sweep 2: Voice and Tone
Focus: Is the copy consistent in how it sounds?
What to check:
- Shifts between formal and casual
- Inconsistent brand personality
- Mood changes that feel jarring
- Word choices that don't match the brand
Common voice issues:
- Starting casual, becoming corporate
- Mixing "we" and "the company" references
- Humor in some places, serious in others (unintentionally)
- Technical language appearing randomly
Process:
- Read aloud to hear inconsistencies
- Mark where tone shifts unexpectedly
- Recommend edits that smooth transitions
- Ensure personality remains throughout
After this sweep: Return to Clarity Sweep to ensure voice edits didn't introduce confusion.
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Sweep 3: So What
Focus: Does every claim answer "why should I care?"
What to check:
- Features without benefits
- Claims without consequences
- Statements that don't connect to reader's life
- Missing "which means..." bridges
The So What test:
For every statement, ask "Okay, so what?" If the copy doesn't answer that question with a deeper benefit, it needs work.
โ "Our platform uses AI-powered analytics"
So what?
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"Our AI-powered analytics surface insights you'd miss manuallyโso you can make better decisions in half the time"
Common So What failures:
- Feature lists without benefit connections
- Impressive-sounding claims that don't land
- Technical capabilities without outcomes
- Company achievements that don't help the reader
Process:
- Read each claim and literally ask "so what?"
- Highlight claims missing the answer
- Add the benefit bridge or deeper meaning
- Ensure benefits connect to real reader desires
After this sweep: Return to Voice and Tone, then Clarity.
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Sweep 4: Prove It
Focus: Is every claim supported with evidence?
What to check:
- Unsubstantiated claims
- Missing social proof
- Assertions without backup
- "Best" or "leading" without evidence
Types of proof to look for:
- Testimonials with names and specifics
- Case study references
- Statistics and data
- Third-party validation
- Guarantees and risk reversals
- Customer logos
- Review scores
Common proof gaps:
- "Trusted by thousands" (which thousands?)
- "Industry-leading" (according to whom?)
- "Customers love us" (show them saying it)
- Results claims without specifics
Process:
- Identify every claim that needs proof
- Check if proof exists nearby
- Flag unsupported assertions
- Recommend adding proof or softening claims
After this sweep: Return to So What, Voice and Tone, then Clarity.
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Sweep 5: Specificity
Focus: Is the copy concrete enough to be compelling?
What to check:
- Vague language ("improve," "enhance," "optimize")
- Generic statements that could apply to anyone
- Round numbers that feel made up
- Missing details that would make it real
Specificity upgrades:
| Vague | Specific |
|-------|----------|
| Save time | Save 4 hours every week |
| Many customers | 2,847 teams |
| Fast results | Results in 14 days |
| Improve your workflow | Cut your reporting time in half |
| Great support | Response within 2 hours |
Common specificity issues:
- Adjectives doing the work nouns should do
- Benefits without quantification
- Outcomes without timeframes
- Claims without concrete examples
Process:
- Highlight vague words and phrases
- Ask "Can this be more specific?"
- Add numbers, timeframes, or examples
- Remove content that can't be made specific (it's probably filler)
After this sweep: Return to Prove It, So What, Voice and Tone, then Clarity.
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Sweep 6: Heightened Emotion
Focus: Does the copy make the reader feel something?
What to check:
- Flat, informational language
- Missing emotional triggers
- Pain points mentioned but not felt
- Aspirations stated but not evoked
Emotional dimensions to consider:
- Pain of the current state
- Frustration with alternatives
- Fear of missing out
- Desire for transformation
- Pride in making smart choices
- Relief from solving the problem
Techniques for heightening emotion:
- Paint the "before" state vividly
- Use sensory language
- Tell micro-stories
- Reference shared experiences
- Ask questions that prompt reflection
Process:
- Read for emotional impactโdoes it move you?
- Identify flat sections that should resonate
- Add emotional texture while staying authentic
- Ensure emotion serves the message (not manipulation)
After this sweep: Return to Specificity, Prove It, So What, Voice and Tone, then Clarity.
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Sweep 7: Zero Risk
Focus: Have we removed every barrier to action?
What to check:
- Friction near CTAs
- Unanswered objections
- Missing trust signals
- Unclear next steps
- Hidden costs or surprises
Risk reducers to look for:
- Money-back guarantees
- Free trials
- "No credit card required"
- "Cancel anytime"
- Social proof near CTA
- Clear expectations of what happens next
- Privacy assurances
Common risk issues:
- CTA asks for commitment without earning trust
- Objections raised but not addressed
- Fine print that creates doubt
- Vague "Contact us" instead of clear next step
Process:
- Focus on sections near CTAs
- List every reason someone might hesitate
- Check if the copy addresses each concern
- Add risk reversals or trust signals as needed
After this sweep: Return through all previous sweeps one final time: Heightened Emotion, Specificity, Prove It, So What, Voice and Tone, Clarity.
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